Amber, I really enjoyed through your blog. I felt you had many interesting opinions and thoughts on the topics that we covered throughout the semester. In your “Marrying to get Divorced” post, I thought your ideas were worthy to take note of. They differed from my personal reasons, but I saw valid reasons in the post to support your claims, and it really got me thinking as a reader about my opinions.
Your directed freewrite on government control contained, although semi radical ideas, interesting and ones that I feel could be supported. You could take this piece and write it from an academic standpoint, and I think you would have a great and strong piece. Finding evidence for your claim would not be difficult, and outside sources would extremely help validate where you personally stand. Your post on materialism was the post that I felt had your best developed ideas, with supporting claims to back up the point you were trying to get across. I also noticed this was one of your longer posts, so I think by elongating your other posts, you would achieve this same thing. One of your best summaries was found in “Natural Behavior in Animals.” I also enjoyed reading the rebuttals that you had to what the author in that piece said.
Overall, in your posts I felt you showed very strong voice as a writer. It was clear how you felt in your posts and where you stood. I think this is a great strength you have. Several writers might use a lot of fancy words, but they lack voice, which makes their work seem empty. I also noticed that you have improved as a writer throughout the course, and that is something to be commended on. Your writing became clearer and your ideas more developed throughout. I think you could do just about any previous post for your final project and do a great job.
Good luck with the rest of your semester and with this class! I hope everything goes well for you.
Jessica
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