Morgan Paulson’s Greatest Hits!

I really enjoyed reading through your blog. You had many interesting ideas presented in your posts. I felt your “Is the Study of Consciousness Scientific?” post was very well written technical piece. Your writing exemplified great precision and portrayed much intelligence on your part. A post that was a good example of a well done summary was your post “Can Machines Think?” It was a well organized post and fluid throughout. You had a lot of technical, researched points, but you also had many intriguing ideas of your own. I liked your “High-heel Madness” post, as well. This was not as advance written as your other posts, but I liked it because you had a lot of voice. It gave insight into who you are as a person and what you are like, something that is not seen in your other scholarly posts.

I feel your “Out of Capitalism Emerges Gay Identity” post offers a great framework for your final project possibly. You have a strong, valid case and could easily add to that by finding other outside sources to validate your argument. You already have the foundation for a good essay. In the post entitled “Immigration and cultural music trends,” you say you disagree with the author, Lipsitz, throughout your post. I think it would be interesting to see what you think the influence of music does to women in particularly, what message it sends to them and possibly to the demographic that you feel that you fit in to. I think this post has a lot of room to grow. Especially if you develop it like I said, what music says to women in your demographic. From your post, I gathered that you probably have a lot of opinions about this, and I guarantee that you could find evidence to back up whatever your claim is. Also, with our final project, we have to have media and visual elements, and this post would be a great one to do that with. I noticed in a few of your first posts that you had improper MLA in-text citations, but these were improved and fixed in your middle posts and carried out through your later posts, so great job on that.

You have many strengths as I writer that I personally saw. Once thing I would like to commend you on is your excellent word choice throughout all of your blogs. You used a variety of words and also more complex words to get your point across. I think this showed credibility to your writings and also emphasized that you know what you are talking about. Another thing I wanted to extol you for is how exceptionally well you develop your ideas. None of your posts were just one short, little paragraph. They were all well thought out posts. You presented your ideas in the opening paragraph and did a superb job of developing and proving your point with the rest of your post.

Once again I enjoyed reading your blog. Good luck with the rest of your semester and I hope all goes well for you!

Jessica