Week 3 Blog Reviews

Hilary Cummings

8/31

I really enjoyed reading this post. At first I was not exactly sure whether I like the idea of you incorporating the idea of the movie Inception, but the more I read, the more I liked it. I liked how you tied in what is current in today’s world with your argument. I like your distinction between what you believe is a thought and what you believe is an idea. I liked the examples you used to back up your argument. I think this is a great piece to work on further for the rough draft of our first essay that is due next week. Just a small grammatical error, in you last sentence you left off and apostrophe on one of the times you use “people’s” because it is possessive. Nicely done.

9/2

This is a good, concise response to a question. I feel you could have formulated and expounded on your ideas more to make a stronger and more definitive argument of why you agree with Minsky. I thought your summary of what he had to say was well written, but you needed to back up more why you agree with him, as well as adding you own reasons why and not just merely agreeing with him. Like a said, it is a good short answer to a question, it could just use more expounding.

Armando Teran Jr.

8/31

Your first paragraph in this response is extremely powerful. I felt you had a definitive argument about what you had to say. You contradict yourself, however, at one point you say that you believe a thought and an idea are the same thing, and then later you say how they are different. Take one side and argue for it and you will have a stronger piece that is fluid with one idea.

9/2

I enjoyed your summary of Minsky’s ideals pertaining to robots. I felt you used his quotes effectively and they flowed nicely and smoothly into your paper and worked in agreement with what you had to say. I also liked your use of a semi-colon at the end of paragraph two; I found it very effective. There were just a few grammatical errors. Make sure you put a comma before the word “but” when you use it. There were a few incidents when you did not do this. Great job overall.

Jordon Fluegel

8/31

You have very good ideas and opinions. I agree with what you have to say about a thought and an idea. I felt like you just answered the question, however, instead of putting it into an essay format and arguing for your point. You have a lot to say about what you think and I feel that it would be effective if you argued for your point over the course of three or more paragraphs. This would put validity behind what you are saying.

9/2

I really enjoyed reading this piece. You had a clear summary of what the article was about and I like how you articulated upon it in your next paragraph. I like how you agree with what he says, you don’t just say “I agree,” but rather you add ideas of your own to why you agree with him. I felt you used and excellent example to prove this. Good work.